John, my dear literary friend,
If you remember in Professor Warren's writing class, the teacher would throw out (or encourage the other students to throw out) challenging elements to make the other students develop their creativity. The Burning Switch story needs some serious help in the grossly contrived and hyper-literal department to relieve all but the worst foamer of the urge to evacuate themselves, and would have had Mr. Warren raving at how the class managed to make it past college entrance exams with 3rd grade writing skills.
Sadly, no one took my "bait" or stopped to ponder why this guy was throwing fireballs.
Editing out the challenges did not help. Of course it didn't hurt either. Kinda like trying to pick up a turd by the clean end. You can't polish a turd. Time to try again and employ basic writing skills like say ... metaphor, literal balance, and perhaps implied meaning / plot.
I trust we can all see the stark difference between this fine body of work and any acknowledged literary piece.
Sorry kids, just a writer's critique. Don't settle for lame or mediocre work. It is beneath you. And please don't mistake constructive criticism for "being negative". I only want the best for my friends.